User:Angel2011
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Hey so this is my page i am Female,14
I love poetry so yea thats why i made this page. i would really appreciate if people would read my
poems and please comment and i'll promise to do the same. Most of my poems are about my life about
how people view one another. A lot of it has to do with current events though i try to balance it
out with a love poem here and there. I hope you all can relate with my writing and i really hope
you comment soon.
My poems are on the discussion page, if you came this far to read all this please check them out. thanks
ya, um the whole religion thing? well, its just im an atheist, while cake is like a christian. and im PRO civil partnership (gay marrige) while cake is not. and just some misunderstanding and conflict <somewhat> between beliefs, thats all. and im glad i dont sound stalkerish, cuz, last time i checked, im not lol. so ya, and im from the west coast man....lol. but um ya, im glad im not the only 1 that thinks that "Autumn Dawn" isnt the best poem of mine. And a heads up, the next two r gonna b "A world under a scarlett constellation (my final farewell)" and "Hazel Moon Eyes"< about a very touchy subject about domestic violence and some horrid memories, good writing tho. and ya, i promise ill let u no 1 b4 any1 else when theyre coming. ok, later. Poet by blood
PS did i really put mideast? omg im so retarded. jeese, whats wrong w/ me. man, im sorry.... Poet by blood
hey wuz up? ya i reallly like "Already Gone", i don't know, i feel a really familiar "vibe" from it or something. Ur really good,(at writing that is, figuring i dont know u, but anyways) i hope u can get the time 2 read mine and ya, just me being observant, but not 2 sound "stalkerish" in a way, but u live in the mideast, or central states don't u? <incase u cudnt tell i make up words and use quotes allot> but ya, nvmd. Just leave a comment or 2 on my poems, PLEASE!!!! im tryin 2 c wut every1's fav. is. thanx..... Poet_By_Blood~
well since u placed ur poems on the discussion page ill put a note here.........i really liked ur poems but id take the thing off............i dont want to know who u r but anybody who does can.......and not for the best reason either.......well i have to go.......and i wanted to write a poem tonight to........i promised The Vagabond that i would and i cant so im sorry............i really liked Change alot but the other one was good too........gotta run.............sorry--Cake 20:03, 19 November 2006 (EST)
It's so hard to leave comments this way. They get all jumbled up, so I am putting a space between them. Anyways, you write really well; Change was my favorite. You really captured the meaning. ~Oreo~
Hey. Firstly, thanks for the very nice comment. Really good to see you like my stuff! Cause i like yours lots. I've written a HUGE discussion on Change. But I think i like "Already gone" more. You should stick it on the Mic page, its amazing. The way you loosely repeat yourself is something ive always liked. What do you feel its about? The Vagabond 15:51, 20 November 2006 (EST) (PS: I hate asking, but comment my poems?)
thanx for commenting.....2 new poems.......cant talk........g2g--Cake 21:51, 20 November 2006 (EST)
hey again.......yeah i wanted to say hey and sorry that u had to leave a note on my page before i could on urs...ive been really busy....but ur the first person who's said something on my page before i could write on theirs........so that's cool....i really like ur poems.........and i think that u should keep writing....they are just so beautiful and capture a moment in the world that's so drammatic...........write back and we'll talk some more.......~Cake
Hey again. yeah, i stuck the big comment on "Change" on the one you'd put on the mic, rather than the one on your user page. Cause it was solely about the poem. And thanks very much for the praise! Real motivator. Plus, you've got my good side now, cause Daydream (along with Passion) is my favourite too. Although i kinda feel bad for picking my favourite "child"! The way you say you write is like me: sometimes lines just come. Occasionally, I'll write about a specific topic, like when i did Extreme or In a Tea Cup. But even for them, i rely on a moment of inspiration for a killer line. But the best bit when poems come to you, at least for me, is to write a bit, and then look at it and think, right, wheres this going. Where has it put me? Thats how i wrote One Small Step, my first ever poem. When i read Already gone, i think of it as being the words of a dead person in heaven. That's probably cause I've just read Cake's poem "The passage way to heaven". But thinking about it (a bit too much), the last verse makes me think more of a baby just born, rather than a dead person. If you'd just had a baby, I'd be trying to say it was about you feeling you've lost all protection over it, now its out of you. But really the angel's are there to portect it now. It can hear its own heart beating, rather than yours, for example. And the baby, as i always feels babies do, thinks the world is a heavenly kinda place. Which isn't a bad outlook to life at all. Anyway, thats the idea that i get after years of being forced to read into poems in english lessons! What do you think about that then? Oh, and the religion thing just cropped up, cause cake was the first person to have a chit chat with me, and shes pretty religious as youve probably noticed. So i filled her in on my religion. And the gay marriage thing just cropped up: me for, her against. Then oreo started talking to me, and came in on both, shes christian and for gay marriage. then Poet by blood, atheist, bi, came in on the marriage to, obviously for. So all in all. I'm rather confused. I was thinking of creating a forum page, whatcha think? The Vagabond 11:51, 21 November 2006 (EST)
in already gone i like how in the first line u say like "Please dont....." and go on with that because it really ties the poem together...........yeah like The Vagabond asked u where do u stand in the gay issue and what's ur religon, im totally Christian and against gay, but if ur for it then i wont be against u, nobody else is really for it anyway in this thing and im not mad at all......but me religious, no im not.....there's a difference(sorry i read The Vagabond and i couldnt stand to let that go past) religious is like the Pharisees, like doing things from a checklist thing, rituals, for me and most Christians, its from the heart......and that's what i believe God wants......well yeah it was me who started the whole discussion on gay marriage and religon, if u read The Vagabond i got really excited that wednesday when i found out that our state had just outlawed gay marriage and i wrote that, and the first question i asked The Vagabond and Oreowas what's ur religon........so there's the long story on how these 2 "issues" got on a very innocent poetry site.......bet u didnt bargain on that when u joined......of course u could have read all this but i thought i'd make it simpler........ok write back<3Cake 16:33, 21 November 2006 (EST)P.S. welcome to our "community" including (i think) The Vagabond,OreoPoet By Blood, and me.........~Cake
course were still ok............im more than happy....so another Christian.....yeah!!!!!!! well i have ther right to be happy.........now as for the gay thing........i see what u mean........now i dont really want the government to control it, but i dont agree with the analogy to blacks and whites......but i think gay marriages are kinda sillly......dont u!?!?!?!??! yeah but since most people think that what the old part of the Old Testament says is out of date than well they decided to get away with it......but i dont believe any part of the bible is out of date.........what about u!?!?!??!--Cake 19:39, 21 November 2006 (EST)
ur right i had forgotten about that stuff.....(in the Bible).......yeah i hate thinking that we used to enslave blacks and mexican-americans....the like......and people still claim predjudice.........isnt that terrible......i cant see how we used to hurt people who were of a different race!!!!!!! i love having these discussions too.......its so much fun to talk and agree and disagree!!!!! as long as we politely disagree......nothing messy!!!!! ok........um im not sure exactly what else to say......hopefully ull write back with a good topic......(any topics good!!!) <3--Cake 13:37, 22 November 2006 (EST)
Well, i think ive worked out how a forum would work on a wiki - its not that hard to suss really, just lots of pages linking to lots of pages. But i cant easily set one up, like on the main page which is where i was thinking, cause you cant edit it unless you're a admin/sysop. Ahwell. Maybe ill get one going somewhere else, or contact the admins and ask them nicely. ooo, and chavs and grebos are phrases we use over here. Google them would be the easiest, plus it gives some pretty funny results. Basically, a chav is a person who thinks they are really hard, goes around in hoodies, stabbing people, wearing loads of bling and being a general pain. But grebos are usually pretty friendly - kinda like soft goths. Long hair, hard rock/metal music. Anyway, hopefully ill have a few new poems soon. How about you? The Vagabond 17:27, 22 November 2006 (EST)
Actually, most chavs are white over here! Black people as you're thinking are called ganstas here too. And we have "the hood" too. but not said that often. A hoodie is one of those jacket type things with a zip, and a hood. oh, and what did you think id be mad about? *confused*. And the quest for a forum has begun. I'll let you know when i know more. Looking forward to seeing the new poetry. Ive put up a couple I quickly did today and yesterday evening. The Vagabond 15:40, 23 November 2006 (EST)
Well, cant stop, but it sounds like youve got the right idea about chavs now. And im glad you knew what a hoodie was, i was pretty worried that you didnt. I havent heard anything on the forum, so ill probs just go ahead and do it. Anyway, got to go. C'ya! The Vagabond 05:21, 25 November 2006 (EST)
ya sry i cudnt remind of my new ones the other day cuz i had 2 go, but theyre up there. I want the truth, do u think that i shud put up a love poem? just wonderin, thats all, cuz i have 1 if u and everyone else wud like to read it. but ya, new poems soon, (in case u cudnt tell i have a lot of them) but peace! ~Poet By Blood
ya, i think im bout to put it up right now, u better put 1 up cuz i dont wanna ruin my image....jk lol. ya, but ya i JUST put up 2 right now. so ya. Poet By Blood~
OK, it's up, it's really cheezy tho. so dont make fun of me, k? now im waiting 4 urs. just let me no wen its up. peace. Poet By Blood~
those r really good. i rly liked the love 1, actually, i kinda have another so im putting that up right now. as 4 a name, um.....how about, tell me what u think, "Unhealthy Reflections"? yes no just tell me. k? ok bye now. Poet By Blood
really like new poems!!!!!!! i put up a new one........gotta go!!!!!--Cake 15:42, 27 November 2006 (EST)
im back..........and i read and reread ur poems.........thinking about it i thought of a title like "Let Me Be Who I Want!" its kinda long and even longer if u put "To Be" at the end if u want........or u could put "Conquered" or "Who is that Girl?" number of things........the title u have up now is good too.........what ever u want......oh im totally against abortion....u could guess but what about u........hope we have a forum page soon!!!!!!~ Cake 18:58, 27 November 2006 (EST)
o hi, just 2 let u no, the poem title, u shud no is completly the authors idea and dont take that 4 granted. whatever u put down is your thoughts and should only b wut u thought, even tho u might not like it, its still ur own and no1 can take that from u, (enough lecturing from some1 younger than u lol), ya thanx 4 the comment, i thought urs wuz so true and good so ya, ,keep it up.
ok gotta go. peace.
Poet By Blood
Hey! I've just read You, and I really like it. When i first joined this, i thought, im going to be all odd, being like the only guy (apart from poet by blood now!), but then i realised it would be good to read female perspective poems. And "You" was spot on for that. I really connected with it, maybe thats cause i kinda feel me and you have the most similar writing style on here. but also, "my big brother" is something a friend called me, when i loved her. So i guess i can connect with it by imagining wishing it would be by her about me. Thats what i got from it anyway. Even without the personal connection, its still my favourite, and i think its your best.
now im reading "A Thin Line" (which is perhaps all the title needs to be - shorten it). I like it - especially the way its a bit more obscure than the rest, i feel. For me, its about a girl becoming someone (this other girl) that she isn't, doesnt particularly want to be, but at the same time, shes jealous of this other girl. As such, shes slowly becoming more and more like her, just to fit in like the other girl does. Yet she still thinks she'll be in this other girls shadow, and its drving her nuts. It screams the title "My Idol" to me. Because, the title's quite misleading, which forces you to really think about the poem. Whatcha think? The Vagabond 11:36, 28 November 2006 (EST)
well anyway hi!!! im can see where ur coming from(abortion) but i still think its wrong because its a life we're killing, an INNOCENT life!!! (that wasn't meant to me mean or angry-the caps-just makin a point!!!!im so not mad!!) i think that there should be no such thing as abortion in the first place!!!!! don't you!!! but i understand about being raped and stuff and i still think that if it ever happened to me (which i hope it doesn't) i would keep the baby!!!!! but not everybody has to do that, that's what i would do!!!!
hey, ive added 2 or more (sometimes i forget) poems up, so ya, when u get the chance u can read them, or not, whatever. ur choice. ok then, bye.
Poet By Blood
Hey! Well, of course you can use My Idol if you want (even if im a bit jealous cause i quite like it, and would use myself), i wasnt sure if you would, cause i could never imagine someone else naming my poetry. But you asked me afterall, and it doesnt bother me if you use it. There must be better titles though. The one at the moment isnt terrible. Anyway, got a brief reply from these guys about a forum - theyre not sure, especially seen as the topic will probably drift off poetry. And this is a poetyr site, run at their own expense - in terms of money and hosting i guess. They're gonna have a chat apparently. More info as i get it. Oh, and Ive got a few new poems up. Hate to ask, but comment on what you feel about them. I only ask cause i feel The Comedown and Marriage are me writing better again, which i hadnt been doing recently. Whatcha think? Oh, and new structre to my user page - done it up like the contents to my imaginary book "My Empire, Your Works". The Vagabond 12:56, 1 December 2006 (EST) You got anything new on the way?
hey its me, um, i hate doing this, but if i have to pick 1 itd have 2 b "Already Gone". But i really put a lot of emotion into my writing, and "Sorrowed Love" is a poem that i wrote about my relationship that is going to the rocks and how its almost over. btw, if u were 2 put urself in a category at ur school, what section wud u b in? im in the "emo" crowd, if u cudnt tell by all the death poetry, hahaha, but ya. lets c, um.......wut wuz i gonna say.......UGH! 4 got. but wuts ur fav of mine again? is it a lovey dovey 1? if it is, i dont care, but um, if i have 2 say it.......either "A World Under A Scarlett Constellation (My Final Farewell)" or "Hazel Moon Eyes" r my fav. (writers point of view. but ya. a new one is comin soon. ok then, bye. Poet By BLood
hey my new one, i just put up, is actually a song that im writing right now 4 my band.....ya, song lyrics, ok then bye. Poet By Blood
KABs BABY! hey girl it finally works!! go comment my poems!!! anyways u know i love all your poems! especially the thin line between her and me! love you, user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
What do you mean you don't know? Mine are NOT better than yours at all. Yours are so much better layed out and stuff...they actually mean something!
Love you SO Ferken much
user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
hey!!!! The site was down for agessssssssss - the peeps who run it appear to be going through a revamp. I wouldn't say the deaht penalty is easy, cause they'll still have to suffer for it later, but we don't have the right to kill. We might as well stick them in our man made purgatories and they can fester and suffer, or repent and change, which has to be a good thing. And to be honest, I don't really know what democrat is.. being in the UK and all. Are they socialist or capitalist, or is it more complicated than that in the US? I'm a pretty strong socialist, practically communist. Communism (minus the whole dictroship and non freedom bit) is actually aa prefect ideal, just wouldnt work in the world at the mo. i think. How you been? The Vagabond 18:05, 22 January 2007 (EST)
i guess so...do you think i should enter the Lit. Festival?? kim wants me too...you should too!! anyways ttyl
love ya,
user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
Yeah, I didn't really mean the socialist party, I meant socialism as a political belief. But the socialist party is probably behind socialism Im guessing from the name.... And we have pretty random names for our politcal parties too - the 3 main ones being Labour, Conservatives, and the Liberal Democrats. Theyre all pretty similar, the differences are things like taxes, and what theyll spend what on. And of course, there is independents who dont belong to a party either. The democrats are doing pretty well lately, and george bush and the republicans are looking pretty scared. I like it when it gets complicated like that.
And yesh, the new poems are very good. I like angels quite a lot, and the 'Once Upon A Time' idea is pretty cool. And me..? Im also very well thanks The Vagabond 15:45, 25 January 2007 (EST)
Ello! Thanks for the comments. I read through your poems, and my favorite is "A Thin Line Between Her And Me". My second favorite is "Once Upon A Time". I picked them because I feel I can relate. I like the way your poems are written, especially the care and detail you put into them. I have a question. When do you write your poetry, mostly? Like, when you are full of emotion or are thinking a specific thing? Or do you just write? --Oreo 00:31, 26 January 2007 (EST)
what about the death penalty?? i dont undersatnd your conversation...uhmmm i dont like bush!! there you go...lol and we do talk about other things...should we only talk about poetry?? me and you have to figure out what we want to enter in the lit. fest. much love user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
I know exactly what you mean. Almost all of my poems start with pure, raw emotion. And then when I'm thinking more rationally again, I edit. But not too much, because I don't want to ruin the meaning. So, the comments on this page are really interesting. Politics, huh? I might occasionally join in, then. --Oreo 12:00, 27 January 2007 (EST)
okay now im bored!!! talk to me!! are you using the poems me and sam picked for lit fest?? user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
oooo very cool! i wanna read some when your done! user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
hey. Sorry its been ages. in response to your question, yeah, of course we know about bush here in the UK, our countries being close and all politically. I'd hope you'd heard of Tony Blair. As for liking him, I dont really know, nor care much to be honest, but the British generally hate him. but we also sterotypically hate americans. But i think thats only cause we hate your leader, bush. As for Once Upon A Time, I can see what you mean by the repetition. When I first read it, I thought it was cheesy and stuff, but the way its used, and the rest of the stuff you say, is good and important, so you get away with it! Plus, its not like the only thing youve ever managed. So, yeah. I really like it anyway. As for cake, he probably gave up on this site like I almost did when it was down forever. I dont really know, i cant talk to him outside of here. The Vagabond 18:37, 5 February 2007 (EST)
I dunno what it is about amaericans. Its probably just bush. Brits are just very sarcastic and stuff, so quite often, we include you or the french or someone in our jokes. Its not hate, its lovingly mocking. I have no problem with americans themselves, I promise! We dont like bush though cause of the war, and cause hes basically controlling tony blair. Anyway, at the moment, teens are always in the papers for anti-social behaviour. Basically being jerks, doing graffitti and mugging old ladies, and throwing bricks through windows. So its a problem if your one of them, and its a problem if youre not (like me) cause we're having to fight that image that the press portary. And we have to abide by all the strict new rules to stop this anti-social behaviour. Meh. Lots of new poems up if your interested.. The Vagabond 17:41, 7 February 2007 (EST)
Hey. Thanks for reading them. I like Change too, although my favourite new one has to be Light. As for yours, I've always said I've got a soft spot for Already Gone and Change. Both are amazing, and say so much so well. I love the concept and feeling you get from Already Gone. And Change is simply amazing - if only everyone could read it and act on what you say. I'm very jealous of Change, I was going to write a poem called "Fake Tan" (lately, I come up with titles or last lines rather than a poem. its annoying) but, it's basically what you say in Change, and you say it much better. As for a third, its got to be You. Again, it's just so well written, and says something I think lots of people can relate to (I know I can), which I think is important in poetry. Oh, and I've put up a couple of new ones. Still below standard I'm afraid. Honestly, would really appreciate the criticism. The Vagabond 09:40, 12 February 2007 (EST)
wow...therez alot of new stuff that ive written. but none of them are very good. so im just gonna keep workin on them! i need some criticism tho! HELP! lol
from the bottom from my heart.
user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
thanks alot. and just for you, i will add black girls. and i definately appreciate the feedback from you. and i cant wait to read your new stuff...*gasp* im so excited. lol and im glad you like How It Is. thats the one that didnt sound any good until i finished it. lotsa love user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
Hey!!! I am definately not mad, and definately definately not dead... i think.. sorry I gave that impression.! :p I read your feedback ages ago, but I havent been able to reply. I've been thinking of what you said, and you're right, it does kinda make very little sense. Well, it does make sense, it just doesn't really have any meaning or wealth. But the whole poem is like that really. I mean, the title itself is pretty convoluted. So I decided to leave it, for now at least. Um.. what else? I was looking at the changes, and there's been barely any! Where is everyone *sulks*. I hope to see some new stuff from you soon :p Only kidding, just put it up when there is some. Oh, and i was surpirsed by yours choice of favs of mine. The only one I like as much as the old stuff is "Light". Ohwell. :)
o wow. i like them all. i think my favorite is...Goodbye! sad, but good! and if untitled isnt who i tyink it is...then who is it about?? cuz you read my mind, i thought exactly who you said it wasnt about! but i undersatnd if you just wrote it. cuz some of my poems arent necessarily about ONE person. or even anybody for that matter!
love you a bunch... user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
i added one more too...its called What We Keep To Ourselves. tell me how you like it user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
it might be about jon...i dont really know!! its confusing! ill talk to you about that later! and i was perty shur it wasnt about "him" it just sounded like it was! your poem i mean love from meez to youzz, user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
oh okay.. i know what you mean!! ill try to see if i can come up with another line! thank you... much love user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
okay i ended it...what do you think?? user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
thank you very much! im talking to luis right now...i talked to you know who about and hour ago!! Lotsa Love, user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
i added two more, Them Boys and Who Is She. what do you think?? can figure out who Them Boys is about? lol Love Ya, user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
youre half right about Them Boys. its most about dustin but part duz have to do with jon! but yeah thank you so much. i like your feedback, i feel good now!! lol i reread your new poems and i focused on what theyre saying. i really like them...theyre awesome! a little sad. but awesoem!
Mucho Amor user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
hey i wrote some new poems!! well, like four. dont worry i didnt write them all in one day. ive been working on a few of them for a little bit. i just forgot to post them!!
lotsa love user:DelFondoDeMiCorazon17
hey. I think I've read all of your new ones, and really liked them. I liked the way they were sort of, half dark. Like, it sounds nice, then isn't. Together does that well. Other standouts were My Saviour and Untitled. All three are amazing I think. Critism? Well, I like the idea behind Darkness, but not actually the poem. The Lion thing sounds forced and cheesy. sorry, its just what I think. Looking forward to whatever's next :) The Vagabond 14:36, 18 March 2007 (EDT)
Hey. Firstly, its been FOREVER since I was last on here. I dunno if you come on anymore now you've got rid of your poems. I realised from the beginning that someone could steal them, but then again, this isn't exactly a massively famous site, nor are my poems really worth publishing. So I'm going to keep them up. Be nice to think we could still talk. The Vagabond 06:14, 21 April 2007 (EDT)
Hey .Great poems .PLs comment on mine--Ami 03:59, 13 April 2007 (EDT)
Fudge monkeys!!!! You took down your poems and I never even got to see them???? Well, please check out my page!!!! User:ilovepoetry
